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the terrible thought of
choking on air that isn't there
please, oxygen be my remedy
don't let me fall apart
tonight there is no time to rest
on self-loathing insecurities
because we're all writing letters
on the backs of our hands
that we'll never send
to anyone, in fear of missing
the fairytale ending we so desperately need
drowning in saltwater tears
this morning they'll form the sea
so let's build a ship and sail
farther than you could ever believe
let's fall off the edge of the map
far from all redundancies
because we're all writing letters
on the backs of our hands
that we'll never send
to anyone, in fear of missing
the fairytale ending we so desperately need
oxygen,
fill my lungs
before this fire makes them bleed
choking on air that isn't there
please, oxygen be my remedy
don't let me fall apart
tonight there is no time to rest
on self-loathing insecurities
because we're all writing letters
on the backs of our hands
that we'll never send
to anyone, in fear of missing
the fairytale ending we so desperately need
drowning in saltwater tears
this morning they'll form the sea
so let's build a ship and sail
farther than you could ever believe
let's fall off the edge of the map
far from all redundancies
because we're all writing letters
on the backs of our hands
that we'll never send
to anyone, in fear of missing
the fairytale ending we so desperately need
oxygen,
fill my lungs
before this fire makes them bleed
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changed the word "land's" in the second verse to "these". Does that make it flow better?
<edit> i've now changed "these" to all. gah. that line does not want to cooperate >.>
<edit ii> i decided to scrap this and used bits of this poem to write a new which i have submitted to a contest found here: [link]
i don't know if putting the new poem on here would be considered publishing it? i guess i just won't put it up for a while xD
changed the word "land's" in the second verse to "these". Does that make it flow better?
<edit> i've now changed "these" to all. gah. that line does not want to cooperate >.>
<edit ii> i decided to scrap this and used bits of this poem to write a new which i have submitted to a contest found here: [link]
i don't know if putting the new poem on here would be considered publishing it? i guess i just won't put it up for a while xD
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and the part that you changed cause it wasn't working, you might try this lands redundancies, or all the worlds redundancies. by the way thats nice word usage.